tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post6081618844267028747..comments2023-10-26T11:14:47.885-04:00Comments on The Waiting is the Hardest Part: Epic Follower Blogfest/ContestHeather M. Gardnerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-56153087278891225652011-04-03T16:28:30.579-04:002011-04-03T16:28:30.579-04:00Lori - Thanks. I did change it because I was the o...Lori - Thanks. I did change it because I was the only one who had a question mark in their pitch. I'll put it in the update.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-78831683302020553112011-04-03T15:44:49.014-04:002011-04-03T15:44:49.014-04:00Probably too late now but I wanted to say I love t...Probably too late now but I wanted to say I love the new pitch!Lori M. Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04858438789496971734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-54971262162223530842011-04-03T11:14:32.711-04:002011-04-03T11:14:32.711-04:00Thank you guys. I rewrote it again. I will post it...Thank you guys. I rewrote it again. I will post it when I get home from IHOP. I'm drowning my fears in pancakes.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-54636351892845966662011-04-03T10:49:27.198-04:002011-04-03T10:49:27.198-04:00Good luck Heather! Keeping my fingers crossed for ...Good luck Heather! Keeping my fingers crossed for you. :)Donna Shieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04607270459657152401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-36696296804594973522011-04-03T10:25:32.140-04:002011-04-03T10:25:32.140-04:00I have to side with Pk on this one. Good luck to y...I have to side with Pk on this one. Good luck to you. 140 characters ... that's not easy to summarize your book.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-87191759743991272542011-04-03T07:43:27.219-04:002011-04-03T07:43:27.219-04:00Yamile - Thank you. I'll take another look.
M...Yamile - Thank you. I'll take another look.<br /><br />Murees - From your lips to an agents ears!Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-55437354006220909402011-04-03T05:39:34.920-04:002011-04-03T05:39:34.920-04:00I personally like both, though the first one gets ...I personally like both, though the first one gets my attention more. Something of being a rebel and going against my mother's wishes and reading the book she warned me not to read.<br /><br />All I am thinking is "Someone please sign this lady already!" I want a copy of that book on my bedside table. Seriously.Murees Dupèhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11781339206465690961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-77364839110702599962011-04-02T23:18:10.758-04:002011-04-02T23:18:10.758-04:00I like the second one much better. Might want to t...I like the second one much better. Might want to tweak the second part so you don't end with a rhetorical question. Just a thought.Yamilehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08769312615756253197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-5297930618971903602011-04-02T21:56:39.477-04:002011-04-02T21:56:39.477-04:00fOIS - Thank you. I appreciate that. Thanks for co...fOIS - Thank you. I appreciate that. Thanks for coming by.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-43767189917794906932011-04-02T20:22:25.185-04:002011-04-02T20:22:25.185-04:00The first one sounds like an opening line, the sec...The first one sounds like an opening line, the second one is more of a description of what the book is about. You made the right choice putting in the second one. Good luck:)fOIS In The Cityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06347958777030988677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-68425574266285700342011-04-02T20:22:23.632-04:002011-04-02T20:22:23.632-04:00douglas - Thank you. I know. Especially since the ...douglas - Thank you. I know. Especially since the book does have all three!<br /><br />Thanks for coming back to read it.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-65275702076985571192011-04-02T20:12:25.205-04:002011-04-02T20:12:25.205-04:00heather,
cool rewrite though looking back it's...heather,<br />cool rewrite though looking back it's hard to lose mentions of sex, drugs, and rock n roll :)douglas esperhttp://www.douglasesper.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-2297634038552256762011-04-02T20:03:19.827-04:002011-04-02T20:03:19.827-04:00Haleywhitehall - Thank you for taking the time. I ...Haleywhitehall - Thank you for taking the time. I know you guys all meant well. Best of luck to all of us.<br /><br />HMGHeather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-26441929665961662312011-04-02T19:56:12.653-04:002011-04-02T19:56:12.653-04:00Much better! I like it! I get the sense of your ch...Much better! I like it! I get the sense of your characters and the conflict. Good work with revising. Good luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-22477486630306989632011-04-02T12:57:55.720-04:002011-04-02T12:57:55.720-04:00Nice. Your pitch is like mine--more abstract. Ma...Nice. Your pitch is like mine--more abstract. Maybe I should rewrite too.Julie Daineshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08350205936357263571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-23278182804232223582011-04-02T12:57:30.479-04:002011-04-02T12:57:30.479-04:00Heard and agree. Thanks guys. I will try to make t...Heard and agree. Thanks guys. I will try to make the deadline with a reworked pitch.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-12352184566618208952011-04-02T12:47:36.227-04:002011-04-02T12:47:36.227-04:00love the idea of this pitch and based solely on it...love the idea of this pitch and based solely on it's voice and attitude i know i'll dig it, but as stated above a little info about the book itself will go a long way...keep on writing!<br />douglas esperdouglas esperhttp://douglasesper.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-90757892851074790172011-04-02T12:47:35.792-04:002011-04-02T12:47:35.792-04:00It stands out, but the problem is that it doesn...It stands out, but the problem is that it doesn't tell us anything about what the book is about. This is more like an author blurb instead of a pitch. I'd love to know what the book is about though!Lori M. Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04858438789496971734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-72443667895372426662011-04-02T12:18:17.483-04:002011-04-02T12:18:17.483-04:00I agree. Different isn't always better unless ...I agree. Different isn't always better unless you want to stand out in a negative way ;). I don't get a sense of the book. I think you should rewrite it according to the formula. I'd be happy to read it again after. I just edited mine based on comments this morning. Please check it out!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-21143634888658456182011-04-02T09:35:19.796-04:002011-04-02T09:35:19.796-04:00I know. I know.
I was hoping it was different eno...I know. I know. <br />I was hoping it was different enough to catch the eye.<br />Thanks for the opinions.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-35499846507819588742011-04-02T09:24:50.327-04:002011-04-02T09:24:50.327-04:00I agree with Pk. As a pitch, it's intruguing, ...I agree with Pk. As a pitch, it's intruguing, but could use some plot and character identification. If you add those elements, and keep the "feel" of this pitch, it will really pop. Best of luck!CobraMisfithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08076556754472094027noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-74167376170102128482011-04-02T08:36:08.858-04:002011-04-02T08:36:08.858-04:00Heather, is this your pitch? I think you need to s...Heather, is this your pitch? I think you need to stick to the actual book's premise: character, goal, conflict. ;)PK HREZOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11650153097981426833noreply@blogger.com