tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post9100644281735651296..comments2023-10-26T11:14:47.885-04:00Comments on The Waiting is the Hardest Part: Men should be like tissues... -- The 99th Page Blogfest/Hop Entry belowHeather M. Gardnerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-20275095797854359202011-01-29T23:41:18.835-05:002011-01-29T23:41:18.835-05:00Mo - Really good point.
Maggie is pretty kick ass....Mo - Really good point.<br />Maggie is pretty kick ass. <br />Thanks for coming by.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-17844154618251536502011-01-29T18:26:44.769-05:002011-01-29T18:26:44.769-05:00Nice page! I'd definitely keep reading.
One t...Nice page! I'd definitely keep reading.<br /><br />One thing... I don't know how much distance is meant by "attacked the other day" but it strikes me as recent - would she have wounds instead of scars? As in, she'd be saying "I'll have the scars to remind me..."<br /><br />I think Maggie's a really strong character, and I like what she shows in not being afraid of the baddie.Mohttp://mowrite.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-2896229600861768832011-01-29T12:23:33.343-05:002011-01-29T12:23:33.343-05:00Perri - Thank you. I'm fond of Maggie.
A few s...Perri - Thank you. I'm fond of Maggie.<br />A few sentences before page 99 is the information you are looking for. I should have cheated! Thanks for coming.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-92162676604127657502011-01-29T09:06:39.662-05:002011-01-29T09:06:39.662-05:00I like Maggie's bravado. That alone would keep...I like Maggie's bravado. That alone would keep me reading. I'm interested to know if someone is really out to get her and why. <br /><br />A few more details about the setting might ground the dialogue, some small observations about where the characters are in place. <br /><br />But either way, I'd read on.Perrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08485133856416996635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-19040754824142453012011-01-29T07:49:44.585-05:002011-01-29T07:49:44.585-05:00erica & christy - That is very kind. Thank you...erica & christy - That is very kind. Thank you so much!<br /><br />Red Boot Pearl - Thank you. I appreciate you stopping in.<br /><br />Meika - That is nice to hear. Thank you and thanks for coming.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-7951840887365713642011-01-29T05:38:28.393-05:002011-01-29T05:38:28.393-05:00Ooh, I'm intrigued! And I love that last line!...Ooh, I'm intrigued! And I love that last line! I'd definitely read on. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11952125198101179121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-54809805782040669382011-01-28T22:42:55.409-05:002011-01-28T22:42:55.409-05:00I like the argument--convincing dialogue is hard t...I like the argument--convincing dialogue is hard to pull offRed Boot Pearlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03015990875361952510noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-14126761766848526352011-01-28T21:42:36.263-05:002011-01-28T21:42:36.263-05:00I really liked this entry. Good job with it and I ...I really liked this entry. Good job with it and I wish you the best of luck with your book(s)!<br />ericaerica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-32318946917489680772011-01-28T20:41:44.855-05:002011-01-28T20:41:44.855-05:00Erinn - Thank you. It's funny actually, there ...Erinn - Thank you. It's funny actually, there was some description just before and after these lines but I couldn't include them due to the guidelines, but yes, it could use a little break. Thanks for hosting and thanks for coming by.<br /><br />Pam - I appreciate that. Thanks for stopping in!<br /><br />Marie - Maggie is a handful. I thank you for coming and reading my page.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-84696541287716615102011-01-28T20:24:57.542-05:002011-01-28T20:24:57.542-05:00I like this. It screams strong, independent, kick-...I like this. It screams strong, independent, kick-butt woman! I'd read on.<br /><br />Marie, http://marierearden.blogspot.comMarie Reardenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13653459061863869033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-48141415876157190222011-01-28T19:30:36.945-05:002011-01-28T19:30:36.945-05:00That was like watching a verbal tennis match--I...That was like watching a verbal tennis match--I'd definitely want to read more. :)Pam Harrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09872183610393667619noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-13031369366132925752011-01-28T19:25:30.370-05:002011-01-28T19:25:30.370-05:00i LOVED LOVED LOVED the final line. Awesome. It&...i LOVED LOVED LOVED the final line. Awesome. It's very dialogue, you might want to break it up with some description. But that's a personal choice. <br /><br />Thanks for joining in on the fun.Erinnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13936046127305211439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-44432416520244299842011-01-28T17:05:57.039-05:002011-01-28T17:05:57.039-05:00Wow. You guys are great for my ego!
KO - I never ...Wow. You guys are great for my ego!<br /><br />KO - I never thought of myself as a mystery writer, then I started this story. Now I'm having a little trouble deciding where to go. It's hard for me to plot but I'm sure it will be rewarding when I get there. Thanks for coming by.<br /><br />Alicia - I don't disagree with you. It needs a little something. Thanks so much for stopping in.<br /><br />Loralie - Thank you. I'm so glad to hear that. Thank you for reading!<br /><br />HowLynnTime - Thanks so much. Although I'm at a slight impasse I do like these characters and would like to get back to them and finish their story. Thanks for coming!<br /><br />Racquel - That is so nice. Maggie has a lot of spunk and I have to remind myself that she would do and say much more interesting things than I would. I appreciate you stopping in.<br /><br />Caroline - I'm glad to hear that. I always like to write dialogue more than the tidbits in between. It was nice of you to stop in.<br /><br />Francine - High praise and a great compliment. I appreciate it. Thank you.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-44209174542289783672011-01-28T16:20:59.248-05:002011-01-28T16:20:59.248-05:00Hi,
Absolutely brilliant! Yeh, I'd read on, b...Hi,<br /><br />Absolutely brilliant! Yeh, I'd read on, but start from the beginning. ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-87077056029841615552011-01-28T16:20:25.902-05:002011-01-28T16:20:25.902-05:00You've done a good job with the dialog and bui...You've done a good job with the dialog and building tension. You've also shown us a bit of their personalities. It's not my usual genre of choice, but I'd flip a few pages and give it another shot because of how well you presented the scene on this page.Carolinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17889762915886434493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-48712717330227067412011-01-28T16:11:18.044-05:002011-01-28T16:11:18.044-05:00That was amazing! I would read your novel, and I&#...That was amazing! I would read your novel, and I'm dying to know how Maggie and Jack got to this point! I love Maggie's spunk. I need more! Great job! :)Racquel Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12878474658503690859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-679228092405588222011-01-28T15:51:30.926-05:002011-01-28T15:51:30.926-05:00It would make a good hook. Who is trying to kill ...It would make a good hook. Who is trying to kill her, how did they fulb it, why is she taking the trash out if he could be lurking...is she daring him to take a second chance? Yes, next page please.HowLynnTimehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07888091432152130146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-36172763802667638992011-01-28T15:40:46.851-05:002011-01-28T15:40:46.851-05:00Your dialogue moves this along so well. I feel lik...Your dialogue moves this along so well. I feel like I've jumped right into the middle of the action. I thought the reactions of both characters were realistic given what you tell us here, and I'd keep reading ^_^Loralie Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07134452749240292803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-52844275560893376662011-01-28T13:55:49.310-05:002011-01-28T13:55:49.310-05:00I'd flip to page 100 because I want to see how...I'd flip to page 100 because I want to see how the scene closes out. One thing I thought was missing was a level of tension. (I know, totally contradicting Holly.) Would it be possible to tighten some of the dialogue to do this?<br /><br />Thanks for participating!Alicia Gregoirehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06660125614529633284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-78711196660403477782011-01-28T13:54:04.713-05:002011-01-28T13:54:04.713-05:00I like this-- it's great to see dialog that fl...I like this-- it's great to see dialog that flows. Technical prowess aside, I also really like the story. I write mysteries, and this is sounding pretty mysterious to me. right up my alley. Thanks for sharing!KatOwens: Insect Collectorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12228171304170449979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-65699262316651728562011-01-28T13:48:47.511-05:002011-01-28T13:48:47.511-05:00Michael - Thank you. I'll be over to see yours...Michael - Thank you. I'll be over to see yours shortly.<br /><br />Mara - Glad to hear it! Thanks for coming!<br /><br />Jennifer - Thank you for that. Maggie doesn't mince words much. <br />The scrapbook mention is a nod to my Mom. She is really the queen.<br /><br />Lisa-Marie - Thank you for saying so. I appreciate it. It was my pleasure.<br /><br />This has been so much fun so far. Must go read some more!Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-83886705931695492592011-01-28T13:28:02.956-05:002011-01-28T13:28:02.956-05:00My interest had definitely been piqued and I would...My interest had definitely been piqued and I would keep reading! Thanks for sharing it, and thanks for stopping by to read mine! Cheers!Lisa-Marie Jordanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14620184280150814909noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-43340690035168456792011-01-28T12:26:08.147-05:002011-01-28T12:26:08.147-05:00I love the last line too. Thanks for sharing.
I ...I love the last line too. Thanks for sharing. <br /><br />I also love that bit under your blog title. I gave up scrapbooking to write. I don't regret the move, but I might have more to show for the scrapbooking by now.Jennifer Hoffinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07616744694563644199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-53595121306445690172011-01-28T12:23:42.976-05:002011-01-28T12:23:42.976-05:00I'd keep reading...but first I'd flip back...I'd keep reading...but first I'd flip back to the beginning to read the setup. I want to know what's going on!Mara Nashhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14628961488068784772noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7760014651173370020.post-48528870036938615532011-01-28T11:21:04.714-05:002011-01-28T11:21:04.714-05:00Love the last line!
Fear is more crippling than ...Love the last line! <br /><br />Fear is more crippling than a car running you over. Good job, Heather.<br /><br /><br />MichaelMichael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.com